Hi Brayden, what an exciting adventure story! I was really hooked and wondering what was going to happen next. What other adventures did Brian have? I'd love to read more interesting things he gets up to! I hope lockdown is going well for you and your family and you are all staying safe and well. Our son and daughter in law are in our bubble with our little grandaughter. We are going for lots of walks and enjoying playing games together. Have a great week and see you at school next week.
Aloha Brayden! What a cool story you have made and I really like it. Its really funny and you have good punctuation as well. Your story was set really well and you put in speeches. Maybe next time you could add some writing on the blog post about what your thoughts are on it.
Ni Hao Brayden. Your writing has been well planned, you've included interesting characters and ensured that you've used a variety of language features and surface features (eg. punctuation). We need to see more of a description on your actual blog post before you link or screenshot your work please. For example, you could explain why you wrote this story, whether you enjoyed writing it, what was difficult about writing it. Thanks for the enthusiasm you have shown for this piece of writing.
Hi Brayden. I enjoyed reading your story about Brian and the bloop. Thank you for sharing your piece of writing. Maybe in your next blogpost you could share a bit more about your work. Well done, keep up the good work.
Aloha Brayden! What a cool story you have made and I really like it. Its really funny and you have good punctuation as well. Maybe you can post a audio with it of someone reading it! Good job.
Hello Brayden. I am Casper from Ahipara School. Your story is so amazing and it has so much imagination put into it. Keep up the good work and blog ya later.
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ReplyDeleteHi Brayden, what an exciting adventure story! I was really hooked and wondering what was going to happen next.
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I hope lockdown is going well for you and your family and you are all staying safe and well. Our son and daughter in law are in our bubble with our little grandaughter. We are going for lots of walks and enjoying playing games together.
Have a great week and see you at school next week.
Aloha Brayden!
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Ni Hao Brayden. Your writing has been well planned, you've included interesting characters and ensured that you've used a variety of language features and surface features (eg. punctuation). We need to see more of a description on your actual blog post before you link or screenshot your work please. For example, you could explain why you wrote this story, whether you enjoyed writing it, what was difficult about writing it. Thanks for the enthusiasm you have shown for this piece of writing.
ReplyDeleteHi Brayden. I enjoyed reading your story about Brian and the bloop. Thank you for sharing your piece of writing. Maybe in your next blogpost you could share a bit more about your work. Well done, keep up the good work.
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ReplyDeleteWhat a cool story you have made and I really like it. Its really funny and you have good punctuation as well. Maybe you can post a audio with it of someone reading it! Good job.
Hello Brayden. I am Casper from Ahipara School. Your story is so amazing and it has so much imagination put into it. Keep up the good work and blog ya later.
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